Friday, February 18, 2011

FINALLY

A LOGLINE!!!

Dakota must avenge her brother's murder, rescue an infant and babysit a 16 year-old male prostitute, all in time to make her high school graduation.

Tuesday, February 15, 2011

New script idea. About as pitchable as they come.

Richard Valentine just wants to slit his wrists in his bathtub, but fate just won't make it easy for him.

"contained" is the word of the day in Hollywood. "Contained" films are cheap (usually only one or two sets), fast (95 page max) and high concept. This will be a very dark comedy about a man who wants to end it all.

I think I will start development by brainstorming every conceivable way that a suicide can be interrupted.

And, I'm thinking a happy ending.

Monday, February 14, 2011

Goddess From The Machine is now titled A BULLET FOR MY BEST FRIEND

that is all.

Thursday, February 10, 2011

I just realized GFM has 3 INCITING INCIDENTS.


a) Dakota finds Duckie's corpse (p. 22)

b) Dakota is killed by Pink Gang (p. 28)

c) Dakota and Val make their agreement (p. 40)

The TRUE II is (a), but (b) and (c) could both serve as the end of a first act. It's like the movie that ends 12 times, but it BEGINS 12 times. I need a second opinion on this.

Tuesday, February 8, 2011

Update Time

Just started draft 3 a few days ago.  Some BIG CHANGES.

Most importantly: Nina is now an ex-Pink Gang Member.  This serves the dual purpose of a) giving Dakota a "dark past" that she has tried to overcome. This gives me a strong personal thread to work with throughout, as she tries to balance being a good person and her violent past. b) it actually creates a strong relationship between the protagonist and antagonist.  Instead of Nina just being a huge bitch who like torturing people, there is actually some pathos.

The next major change is that I am getting rid of the "mystical" elements. No more "fusing between man and machine", no more drinking oil, no more super-human strength. I don't know if this is going to work, and it may be more interesting to keep her as a bio-organic killing machine, but for this draft, I'm going to keep it realistic. Or, at least, within the realm of physical possibility.

Also, I am cutting back on the vindictive, mindless killing. I am working on justifying the violence more.

Vicky is becoming an interesting character: she was Dakota's replacement, and is the "new girl". In front of the gang, she is an over-enthusiastic, insecure geek, but when she is alone with Dakota, she is evil. She is becoming something of a psycopath, but I have to figure out WHAT SHE WANTS and how she works into the story.